Where I sit, like a loser.
Sinking into the sweet past,
Cursing, why didn't the time last.
Every night, we'd made love.
Why isn't it the same, now?
Though, on the same bed, we sleep,
He doesn't hear me weep.
His kisses aren't warm, anymore.
Over me, he chose that whore.
Once, to look like her, I painted my face.
Yet, he remained in her embrace.
Every night, I sit in a silent corner.
Wondering about him and her.
Musing, should I tell him,
how, I miss him?
it was a good one..I appreciate ur passion to keep blogging..u come out with updates very frequently..thats nice..an yeah the blog was good too..just like the typical nethra's stuff..
ReplyDeletehey nethra...
ReplyDeletereally very nice..khe khe khe...
i jus love when u hav those rhymin words...
musing shud i tell him
how i miss him...
wow... like it so much
Really a good one. I liked it a lot.
ReplyDeleteu r real actv blogger who write sumthn reading..among few i guess.as per me its amazing as like ur previous post..bt the best part was Sinking into the sweet past,
ReplyDeleteCursing, why didn't the time last.
truly majestic lines..i too wrote a poem on breakup sumday bfore
Nice poem.I really loved it.
ReplyDeleteNice!! somehow it reminded me of the book, 'The Dancing Girls of Lahore' by Louise Brown...
ReplyDelete:)
love ur poems.. keep writing more...
ReplyDeletePretty decent, although it seemed a bit weird when I read "Once, to look like her, I painted my face" but I guess that's what is called poetic license. Keep writing :)
ReplyDeleteYour poems are really goood.........
ReplyDeletekeeeeeep it om.
:)
really touchy. Nice poem!
ReplyDeletenice... rhyming was nice... sink more into the feeling and you will come up with few more intense lines.... like the last 2 lines a lot...
ReplyDeletewell written, full of pain.
ReplyDeleteshort .... story conveyed .... keep writing
ReplyDeletegood one
hi buddy,
ReplyDeleteIs it really him and her or something like laptop sort of gadget??.
I liked the narration...it is simple and realistic....
hey nethra nice poem....simple nd touching :)
ReplyDeletebut finished so early :(
still like it :)
Hi...
ReplyDeleteAm a first timer here!!!
A very touching and beautiful poem indeed!!
:-)
Very well written.. Full of pain and emotions.. Each and every word shouts out by itself, speaking of your love for him.. An enjoyable read.. Keep it flowing... :-)
ReplyDeletehi nethra
ReplyDeleteit was an excellent read, simple with its words and deep in meaning. I liked it a lot. Keep em coming :)
very nice poem :)
ReplyDeletecan feel that it's deep from your heart!! keep writing :)
ReplyDeleteaabb mostly in every stanza... every emotive poem
ReplyDeleteAshes
really nice but why so sad ? not anymore :). keep writing dear.
ReplyDeletehey nethra...
ReplyDeletereally nice, keep writing.
Hi buddy....
ReplyDeletePlease do check my reply to your queries on "If I were a baby"...
Something is waiting for you to accept...
cheers,
mahesh :)
I really loved this poem...It's touchin...
ReplyDeleteTrue words....True feelings....
Keep writing Nethra...=]
vry nice poem
ReplyDeletegreat work
keep it up
@loveish
ReplyDeleteThanks for visiting my blog. :)
i am impressed dear :)
ReplyDeleteNeel,
ReplyDeleteThanks again. :)
Nice one dear..
ReplyDeleteHey thats an emotional package..Luvd it!
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